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No.1 • (Worse) How to adjust multiple settings of the process parameters was outside of the knowledge of the engineers. • (Better) The engineers did not know how to adjust multiple settings of the process parameters.
No.2 • (Worse)Standardization of the accreditation procedures was achieved by the committee. • (Better) The committee standardized the accreditation procedures.
No.3 • (Worse) For optimization of the conditions for robust design problems, the applicability of a novel approach is performed in this study. • (Better) This study applies a novel approach to optimize the conditions for robust design problems.
No.4 • (Worse) An experiment of the PCVD process in IC manufacturing is required of the engineer. • (Better) The engineer must experiment with the PCVD process in IC manufacturing.
No.5 • (Worse) Significant contributions by the proposed procedure are made to the manufacturing sector. • (Better) The proposed procedure significantly contributes to the manufacturing sector.
No.6 • (Worse) Transformation of the structure is achieved by strict control of the variables. • (Better) Strictly controlling the variables transforms the structure.
No.7 • (Worse) A conclusion is made in this study that it is necessary for the parameters to be varied by engineers to ensure that operations are effectively controlled by the system. • (Better) We conclude that engineers must vary the parameters to ensure that the system effectively controls operations.
[Note 3.15] • First Person is appropriate when the author wants to emphasize his or her opinion. • Other examples include We can infer, We postulate, We recommend, and We hypothesize.
No.8 • (Worse) An assessment of the proposed method in this section is made so that accurate data can be ensured. • (Better) This section assesses the proposed method to ensure accurate data.
No.9 • (Worse) Complexity of the computational process is increased by their approach. • (Better) Their approach further complicates the computational process.
No.10 • (Worse) Described in the following section is how implementation of the control factor is achieved by the proposed scheme. • (Better) The following section describes how the proposed scheme implements the control factor.
No.11 • (Worse) No significant effect on the mean response is made by the factor. • (Better)The factor does not significantly affect the mean response.
No.12 • (Worse)Assessment of the product's reliability is made by the practitioner is achieved through means of compilation of statistics. • (Better)The practitioner assesses the product's reliability by compiling statistics.