SAT Writing Multiple Choice Improving Sentences

1. Practice Problems and Explanations SAT Writing Multiple Choice Improving Sentences

2. Approaching IS • Strategies • Don’t keep rereading A • Shortest is USUALLY the best • Longest is USUALLY the worst • Pay attention to underlines • Stuck? Look at selections B – E • Whatever part of speech is changing could be a clue

3. Directions • Print out the (download) • Take 20 minutes to complete

4. DM • Though one of the most feared breeds ofdog in the world, actually the pitbull often bred to be quite friendly. • actually the pitbull often bred to be quite friendly. • the pitbull, which can actually often be bred to be quite friendly. • the pitbull can actually often be bred to be quite friendly. • the pitbull actually was often bred to be quite friendly. • the pitbull actually having often been bred to be quite friendly.

5. Inf/Gerund • At the turn of the 20th century, community leader Booker T. Washington envisioned an African-American community rooted in entrepreneurship and encouraged African-Americans at the time to seek success through enterprise. • to seek success • that success was sought • seek success • they sought success • they were seeking success

6. Redundant/Wordy • For some reason, the singer, after having received permission to spray paint graffiti on one building, decided to vandalize another. • after having received permission to spray paint graffiti on one building, • as soon as he received permission to spray paint graffiti on one building, • having received permission to spray paint graffiti on one building, • after he received permission to spray paint graffiti on one building, • when he received permission to spray paint graffiti on one building,

7. Pro-Ant • The general made his strategies too hastily, without putting enough thought behind it. • too hastily, without putting enough thought behind it. • too hasty, without putting enough thought behind them. • too hasty, and there was not enough thought behind them. • too hastily, without putting enough thought behind them • too hastily, and there is not enough thought behind them.

8. Mod/Pro In Minecraft, a griefer is when a player purposefully harasses other players within the game, using aspects of the game in unintended ways. • when a player purposefully harasses other players within the game • a player who purposefully harasses other players within the game • purposeful harassment of a player against other players within the game • if a player purposefully harasses other players within the game • harassment of other players within the game by another player

9. Pro • Neither Melissa nor Jackie had their library cards with them. • Neither Melissa nor Jackie had their library cards with them. • Neither Melissa nor Jackie had their library cards with them. • Neither Melissa nor Jackie had her library cards with her. • Neither girl had her library card with her. • Neither Melissa nor Jackie had her library card with her.

10. Pro-Amb/FC (gerund-clause) • Riding a skateboard down a hill is in some ways like when you are snowboarding down a mountain. • is in some ways like when you are snowboarding • in some ways is in the same class as snowboarding • is in some ways similar to when you are riding a snowboard • is in some ways like snowboarding • is in some ways like riding a snowboard

11. Pro - # • At the conference, you will have a chance to meet the president and manager of the institution, who will be glad to share with you some experiences about his work. • you will have a chance to meet the president and manager of the institution, who will be glad to share with you some experiences about his work. • you will have a chance to meet the president, who is also manager of the institution, and who will be glad to share with you some experiences about his work. • you will have a chance to meet the president and manager of the institution, who will be glad to share with you something about experiencing his work. • you will have a chance to meet the president and manager of the institution, who gladly share experiences with you as to his work. • you will have a chance to meet the president and the manager of the institution, who will be gladly sharing with you some experiences about his work.

12. Pl/# • As an expert in the field of martial arts, Bruce Lee and Jackie Chan were able to popularize Asian fighting techniques around the world. • As an expert in the field of martial arts • An expert in the field of martial arts • Experts and studying martial arts • As experts in the field of martial arts • Since being experts in the field of martial arts

13. F-Coord • French fries originated in America, and many people think it was France. • and many people think it was • many people thinking it was • and many people thinking • not, as many people think, • but many people think it to be

14. F-Coord • By starting it at noon, the meal would be ready to eat by dinner. • By starting it • If it were to start • Were it to be started • After starting it • It would be started

15. F-Coord • Since failed investments bankrupted the company, and so the CEO must decide whether to close a branch office or take a pay cut. • company, and so • company is a matter • company, • company; then • company; this is a problem

16. F-Coord • No sooner had he left the airport when the disguised celebrity was noticed and everyone began to scream. • when the disguised celebrity was noticed • then the disguised celebrity was noticed • than the disguised celebrity was noticed • but the disguised celebrity was noticed • the disguised celebrity was noticed

17. MM • Some houses continue to smell of cigarette smoke even after the furniture has been moved out into the street, which can be absorbed by the wallpaper or carpet. • street, which can be absorbed by the wallpaper or carpet. • Street that can be absorbed by the wallpaper or carpet. • street, it can be absorbed by the wallpaper or carpet. • street, while it is absorbed by the wallpaper or carpet. • Street; the smoke can be absorbed by the wallpaper or carpet.

18. DM • Often regarded as a legend in martial arts, a golden statue of Bruce Lee erected by local residents can be found in Mostar, a city in Bosnia and Herzegovina. • a golden statue of Bruce Lee erected by local residents can be found in • Bruce Lee’s statue erected by local residents can be found in • Bruce Lee is honored with a golden statue erected by local residents in • local residents made a golden statue of Bruce Lee can be found in • a golden statue honoring Bruce Lee erected by local residents can be found in

19. MM • Mr. Park, who enjoys introducing Westerners to Korean culture, teaches hangeulto them dressed like King Sejong. • teaches hangeulto them dressed like King Sejong. • teaches hangeulto them while he dresses as King Sejong. • dresses as King Sejong and teaches them hangeul. • teaches hangeuldressed like King Sejong to them. • teaches them hangeul while dressed like King Sejong.

20. No error In War and Peace, Leo Tolstoy presented his theories on history and illustrated them with a slanted account of actual historical events. • Illustrated them • Also illustrating them • He also was illustrating these ideas • Then illustrated the theories also • Then he went about illustrating them

21. No error Congress was in no doubt about who would take credit for winning the war on inflation. • About who would take credit • About who takes credit • About whom would take credit • Of who would take credit • Over who would take credit

22. F-Coord One cause of digestion problems is when patients take too many antibiotics and end up killing the good bacteria in their stomachs. • One cause of digestion problems is when patients take too many • One cause of digestion problems is that patients take too many • Most digestive problems arise when patients take too much • Most digestive problems occur as a result of taking too many • Most digestion problems occur due to the fact that

23. FC Last year, more college graduates entered into graduate school programs than the job force. • the job force • The job force did • Those compared to the job force • Job force people • Into the job force

24. RO Before an important match, Angela listens to heavy metal music, Jenny stays up all night playing games. • Before an important match, Angela listens to heavy metal music, Jenny spends all night playing games. • Angela listens to heavy metal music before an important match, and Jenny, she plays games all night. • Before an important match, Angela listens to heavy metal music; Jenny stays up all night playing games. • Jenny stays up all night playing video games with Angela listening to heavy metal music before an important match. • Before an important match, Angela listens to heavy metal music, while Angela stays up all night playing games.

25. F-Coord • Privatization of a nation’s water supply will certainly lead to lower prices, which some economists are warning that thismay lead to a lower level of cleanliness. • which some economists are warning • however, some economists have warned • but some economists warn • although some economists are warning • and some economists who warn

26. F-SUB • Both criminals and Batman come out at twilight, and the criminals would look for victims and Batman would look for criminals. • and the criminals would look for victims and Batman would look for • and the criminals would look for victims while Batman look for • the criminals look for victims and Batman is looking for • the criminals looking for victims while Batman looks for • the criminals to look for victims and Batman to look for

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