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English 1A. Editing. Shorten and clarify:. When Thomas Jefferson wrote the Declaration of Independence, he foresaw the coming of great changes within the times that he lived in. When Thomas Jefferson wrote the Declaration of Independence, he saw great changes coming. Shorten and clarify:.

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English 1A

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  1. English 1A Editing

  2. Shorten and clarify: • When Thomas Jefferson wrote the Declaration of Independence, he foresaw the coming of great changes within the times that he lived in. • When Thomas Jefferson wrote the Declaration of Independence, he saw great changes coming.

  3. Shorten and clarify: • The Declaration embodied many of the ideas that separated the colonies from England and thus began the process of creating a new country out of the fray. • The Declaration of Independence began the process of creating a new country out of the ideas that separated the colonies from England.

  4. Combine the sentences: • One of the ideas that Jefferson wrote about was the freedom of religion. This was a core idea that made the basis of a republican society work, via separation of church and state. • Jefferson wrote that freedom of religion and the separation of church and state were the foundations of a republican society.

  5. Shorten and clarify: • This caused many schisms in the many faiths that were already implanted in the colonies. • This freedom caused schisms among the existing faiths.

  6. Change the wording at the end: • Moreover, it took a long time to separate the church from the state because of the old foundations set by England. • Moreover, it took a long time to separate church from state because they were not separate in England.

  7. Shorten, clarify, and combine: • Another idea entrenched in the Declaration of Independence is that men should not be subject to the hierarchy that was the foundation for a monarchical government -- such as the one that England had used unsuccessfully with the colonists in the new world. A king could do as he pleased and thus wreaked havoc within the colonies by taxing without representation. • Jefferson claimed that men should not be subjected to an arbitrary monarch that could tax without representation.

  8. Begin with “He also…”: • Jefferson believed that the English form of governing was no longer the acceptable way for a human to be treated and this was the basis for him to ink the Declaration against primogeniture and other forms of “special” treatment for Lords who governed the colonies so poorly through the influence of King George the III. • He also complained about primogeniture and the abuses of the English Lords who governed the colonies.

  9. Shorten and clarify: • Many wealthy merchants and farmers realized that they could better govern their own people in a rational manner, rather than utilizing the sometimes haughty and foolish measures of the British. • Many merchants and farmers realized that they could govern better and more rationally than the British.

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